Jasmine Hart

This is a nice fun poem.The tone is great throughout. I really love; "Bouncy-bouncy everywhere." and "I will look like “weird al” Yankovic. Earrings get caught, so hard to maintain. ...

If it's a very small town you're probably best off making it up. The smallest county is Louth, if that's any use to you. If you want it to be ...

I'm just...not writing...

Sounds like a girl in modern times,American, blonde hair, blue eyes, maybe glasses. I'd imagine someone who wants to fit in but doesn't, and has maybe one or two close ...

Jasmine, You just left me. I don't think you realize the severity of the situation. I can't be of any use to anyone unless you follow me and watch what ...

I'd love one on this if you get a chance; If you don't, don't worry. I'm happy to critique poetry in return so feel free to pm me or post ...

[s]I'd love one on this if you get a chance, and I'm happy to return the favour, though I tend to critque more poetry as I think my poetry critiques ...

This flows beautifully and teh enjambment builds momentum effectively. The sense of purpose is strong. I love; "I burned myself into its crust " and "Itchy and crusted black with ...

Your imagery is beautiful, and the theme is interesting. I love the first stanza. It flows well, and I love "born from the middle month." I think the layout could ...

I think I'm going to ram my fingernails into the back of my hand. With matching charcoal minds we find we can't converse unless through loaded shouts. Mop mop mopped ...

I love the metaphor, and, as always, you express yourself beautifully. I really loved; "careening too close to the shoulder, caressing my navel", and "I balance on the curb – ...

This is really lovely Kit. It's so lyrical, and flows beautifully. I love the theme. For some reason it feels different to your other poetry...more mature or poetic or something...neither ...

I spell it with a c.

This is nice and staright-forward. You handle the form well. In the second last line, did you mean "Except wait for summer camp". Jas

It flows well, but it seemed more like a pre or post-piece to me. The concept is interesting, but I think you'd be better able to engage the reader if ...